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Inner Demons

Submitted by Depressed 1 on Sat, 2023-07-08 01:33

I can feel the pain running down my spine

I can feel the darkness taking over my mind

I can hear the voices inside of my head

I cannot believe the things they have said

They make me act like I am a righteous fool

They use me as their unwilling tool

They make me dance to their evil melody

They are cruelly and slowly taking over me

Soon my inner demons will break out

For the worse for humanity, no doubt

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neopoet

Sat, 2023-07-08 07:33

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Sat, 2023-07-08 02:04

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you are not so tired of holding those demons in, that you let them out. I think that would be a bad thing.
I hear the pain here, if you are feeling this bad... I think that it might be a good thing to ask for help.
It's as real as you make it.. Good, but worrisome. ~ Geezer.
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Sat, 2023-07-08 04:55

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Someone once said if you want to play the blues you gotta live the blues. I write what I know.

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Sat, 2023-07-08 10:04

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I go there, but don't stay. I go wherever I need to go, and as soon as I'm done with the sad, depressing stuff, I get out and visit somewhere else. Just making sure that you are alright. ~ Geez.
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