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Inner Demons
I can feel the pain running down my spine
I can feel the darkness taking over my mind
I can hear the voices inside of my head
I cannot believe the things they have said
They make me act like I am a righteous fool
They use me as their unwilling tool
They make me dance to their evil melody
They are cruelly and slowly taking over me
Soon my inner demons will break out
For the worse for humanity, no doubt
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-07-08 07:33
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Geezer
Sat, 2023-07-08 02:04
I hope that...
you are not so tired of holding those demons in, that you let them out. I think that would be a bad thing.
I hear the pain here, if you are feeling this bad... I think that it might be a good thing to ask for help.
It's as real as you make it.. Good, but worrisome. ~ Geezer.
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Depressed 1
Sat, 2023-07-08 04:55
Thanks Geezer
Someone once said if you want to play the blues you gotta live the blues. I write what I know.
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Geezer
Sat, 2023-07-08 10:04
Yeah, I get it...
I go there, but don't stay. I go wherever I need to go, and as soon as I'm done with the sad, depressing stuff, I get out and visit somewhere else. Just making sure that you are alright. ~ Geez.
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