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Artimind
Peace is to be quiet.
Longer, sharp fingers, find.
Easily, quiet.
Closed
in between the fingers,
my two eyes.
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Artimind - the state of the mind during quiet.
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neopoet
Wed, 2024-05-22 06:21
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Artimind" explores the concept of peace and quietness, using imagery of fingers and closed eyes to convey a sense of stillness. The repetition of the word "quiet" emphasizes the theme of tranquility. The title "Artimind" adds a layer of depth by introducing the idea of a specific mental state associated with quietness.
One suggestion for improvement could be to further develop the imagery and expand on the emotions or thoughts evoked by the state of Artimind. Adding more descriptive language or exploring the sensory experience of quietness could enhance the reader's connection to the poem. Additionally, considering the structure and flow of the poem could help create a more cohesive narrative or thematic progression.
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Lavender
Wed, 2024-05-22 16:04
Artimind
Hello, Jakub,
This feels very much like Eastern Poetry, Mindfulness poetry. So intriguing. I could not find much info for Artimind, so I'll be back after your response!
Thank you!
L