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Brick by Brick

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Thu, 2024-06-27 12:19

You spent so much time trying.
Hoping to get your family to be
who you wanted them to be.

But some of them would never become
who you wanted them desperately to be.
Inflicting untouchable hurt that love applies so deftly.

Finally, the sting let you go to re-build with family
and friends who’ve always been there with you.
Exactly the home you’ve needed all along.

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Free verse
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Neopoet Weekly 06/23/24 to 06/29/24
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Not Explicit Content

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Rula

Fri, 2024-06-28 03:26

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Hello Anthony
this is an awesome poignant writing.
What I like about this one is that although there is much pain well expressed in the middle stanza " inflecting untouchable hurt", there is also hope shining in the closing lines as we find the supportive people.
A touching piece indeed.
Thank you for sharing.

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