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Easter Sunday

Submitted by ES Poetry on Mon, 2023-04-10 12:44

Earliest gardening day of the year
first to have sunshine all day
The flowers greeted me with Easter energy
in a colourful ballet
As I mowed the winter grass of long
a wounded hyacinth fell
Sorrowful scented delicate violet-
I took her in for her pleasurable smell
Sat in water with her vivid petals
her garden life abruptly gone
Flowers bring pleasure to this house
on par with a newly cut lawn

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Easter Sunday" effectively captures the excitement and renewal that come with the start of spring. The imagery of the colorful flowers dancing in the sunshine is vivid and uplifting. The inclusion of the wounded hyacinth adds a touch of melancholy to the poem, but also highlights the fragility of life and the importance of appreciating beauty while it lasts.

One suggested line edit would be to change "in a colourful ballet" to "in a colorful ballet," as "colorful" is the American spelling of the word.

Overall, the poem is well-crafted and effectively conveys the themes of renewal and appreciation for the beauty of nature.

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