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Favorite Wintry Memory (Dec. Monthly Challenge)
Come see life buds as tucked in bed
as soon as winter showed its head,
but I, with my younger siblings
wake to take up what winter brings.
Generous clouds, those full of rain
soon have washed the seasonal pain,
the snow flakes fall, the snowman sings,
"wake to take up what winter brings."
And when the sky is almost clear,
there shall be more to smell and hear;
the rainbow's hanging with no wings,
wake to take up what winter brings.
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The kyrielle
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/kyrielle.html
Kyrielle
A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines), and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum.
Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB.
Mixing up the rhyme scheme is possible for an unusual pattern of: axaZ, bxbZ, cxcZ, dxdZ, etc. with Z being the repeated line.
The rhyme pattern is completely up to the poet.
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Comments
RoseBlack
Wed, 2022-12-21 19:01
Love this
I think Neo needs emojis because I cannot love this enough. I love the different styles you bring with your works and how you explain them so others may explore and try their hand if they wish. Wonderful content and wonderful job
~RoseBlack~
Rula
Thu, 2022-12-22 02:02
Dear Carrie
You make my day with your comment. I always wished for emoji's but unfortunately, the software won't allow it.
Your appreciation is much appreciated.
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Lavender
Wed, 2022-12-21 19:37
Favorite Wintry Memory
Hello, Rula,
Another well-written structured poem. Wonderful energy - I can feel the excitement from you and your younger siblings, and can appreciate the beauty that waits for all of you outdoors. Great job with meter and rhyme. Well done!
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S2,L2 - use "have" in place of "has" when referring to clouds, plural. Correct?
Rula
Thu, 2022-12-22 02:12
Hello Lavender
So many thanks for your kind and endless support.
I appreciate the hawk eye. I don't know what I was thinking but could only blame the late night.
Always great to hear from you dear.
Thanks a bunch.
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