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Flight

There came a sleepless night
that offered little consoling light
from a sad crescent moon.

Amid the heavy silence
after the gouging violence
of the red afternoon,

they dug one vast, shallow grave
for those they tried, but could not save
and laid them there to rest.

Then gathered what remained,
though it was tattered and cruelly stained,
battered and oppressed.

Into this sleepless, cold night,
they began their uncharted long flight
away from all they had known.

Toward no promises, no welcome trust,
leaving ruined land and sullen dust
where once they had called home.

They walked the punishing path,
numbed with grief and suppressed wrath,
souls and hearts bearing dead scars.

Pausing to pray in solemn silence
for their deliverance and guidance,
they cried for mercy, looking at the stars.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
For all those who've had to flee.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

You have put a different spin on this contest...I really like it! I think you have a winner here. My favorite lines are:

Toward no promises, no trust,
leaving ruined land and dust
where once they had called home.

They walked the punishing path,
numbed with grief and suppressed wrath,
souls and hearts bearing dead scars.

I really admire this side of you. An excellent poet in any venue! * eddy styx
"hell" from Cat whose jaw I must scoop up from the floor...

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Started to write, and this is what made its way into a poem. I really appreciate you!
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