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I Want to Cry...
I need to cry more, it makes me feel better
A release from the everyday stress
A change from complacent and the weary
To those days that I love best
My muse loves me, and I love her back
I couldn't want for more
She brings me ideas from everywhere
She leaves them outside my door
Don't chase her, she returns on her own
I'll sit waiting patiently
Gone for days, she roams for thoughts
Bringing them home to me
I saw her today, as she raced away
After bringing me new fears
Quiet now, I am writing them down
And then I'll release my tears
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Structured: Western
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Mr joghe
Wed, 2022-12-14 14:36
Nice write...
Nice write...
I drew the first theme from the first line: theme of love which makes the poet cry and also will to cry more because of his love for his muse.
Theme of hope which gives the poet assurance that his muse will come back again.
Theme of patience or endurance "I'll sit waiting patiently". He is hoping to have the old days again.
The antithesis of this line "I
need to cry more, it makes me feel better". How would cry makes one feels better?
The poet was saying the opposite of sadness which is happiness...
Great work... Great pen...
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Geezer
Wed, 2022-12-14 15:03
I hold in...
the fears and the tears, and then my muse brings me
something to help release them. She knows when I have a big build-up of them
I get cranky and hard to please. Most times, she is a funny, witty, being
and gives me ideas that purr, like cat poems or the ones about how funny a situation
is. Today, she brought me this. Every time she shows up, it's something different.
Thanks for your read and comment. ~ Geezer.
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-12-14 17:02
You’re starting to sound like me
If you ever need tears I could use a day off once in awhile. Seriously though I could put my name on this one and I doubt the folks would know the difference. What great poem my man.
Love it!
Tim
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-12-15 09:53
I think I am...
flattered! No, I know I am! I have learned so much from all my Neo. family, I steal from you all every day! I am an admirer of your style, and I suppose that it has rubbed off on me. I hope that you don't mind if occasionally, I emulate you or any other poet in the family. Hey, don't they say that imitation is the sincerest form of flattery? ~ Geez.
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-12-14 18:59
Borrow all you want from me
Flattery will get you places!
Ha! Seriously though, awesome job.
Lavender
Wed, 2022-12-14 18:19
I Want to Cry...
Well done, by both you and your wise and wonderful muse.
L
Geezer
Wed, 2022-12-14 18:46
Thank you...
For the read and comments. I'm glad that you were pleased with this one. Yes, my muse is a wise and wonderful being. I love the tales she comes up with, but she says that I could do some of the neighborhood tales on my own. I try, and I think I do pretty well with the cats. I do lean on her a little bit, I guess. Again, thanks for the read and the continuous support. It is much appreciated. ~ Geez.
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author commentRula
Thu, 2022-12-15 02:56
Nice
Love story sir Gee.
Wish you the best with your muse. Wish never to lose again or we shall lose a distinguished poet.
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-12-15 09:59
I don't worry...
about my muse getting lost, she always comes back. Of course, if she is gone for more than a week or so, then I start to worry a bit. Once, I was even a little angry with her for being gone for a couple of weeks! But she brought me some wonderful stories, and just hung out for a month or so, cuddling and whispering stories in my ear. Of course, I forgave her! Thank you for the read and comments. ~ Geez.
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author commentEmerald1
Thu, 2022-12-15 04:03
Like this a lot
A great piece , I dont have any fancy poetic terms to use here but I love the narrative of the relationship between you and your muse ,the imagery is lovely as is the idea of letting her free to roam and collect ideas and brings them home to you as a gift that you can then use to write releasing stresses, tears flowing with relief , the tears at the beginning also relieving stress , the stress of boredom when I assume your muse is out gathering ideas , Hope her voyages are short and productive
Geezer
Thu, 2022-12-15 10:10
Oh Hell yeah...
She has brought me so many stories and not just sad tales designed to make me cry. She knows how to make me laugh too!
She is great friends with my tinnitus, and they delight in laughing at the things they put together just for me to write about.
[Tinnitus] - Ringing, hissing, tumultuous noises from ear damage, which garbles what I hear and makes for some funny stuff.
Thank you for your comments and letting me know you appreciated this one. ~ Geezer.
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author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2022-12-15 06:14
dear Sir Gee,
I hope that you are not without your muse for very long at a time. be it you or Geezer, your darker side always wins me over, too. I usually find a nugget of truth in all you write! see you on the flip side, lol.
*hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-12-15 10:15
We all...
Geezer, Sir Gee, Geez and Killer, are always glad to hear from you. You know Killer has a special place in his heart for you, and where he goes, so the rest. Oh yes, Anubis has to get his barks in. [He sends sloppy kisses]. Truth is a matter of perception, I suppose, but thank you. Love from all, Geez.
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author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2022-12-15 13:05
:)
all of you are special to me and easy to relate to. styx is very fond of you as well ;)
love from us both, Cat & eddy
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lovedly
Thu, 2022-12-15 08:11
Dear SIR GEE YOU ARE TOO GOOD at WESTERN STYLE POETRY ONLY
My poetry master once told me
It's not the job of the poet to cry
but his poem must wet readers eyes
So now today you made me cry
by pulling my leg
coz of freestyle
you did try
My present teacher
PhD of poetry says
''Gee has warned you sufficiently
switch over to Western Style
don't boast of your FREE STYLE ..
Flattery is the best way
to show your isolated pathway
ASK GEE
Why did he try
not to cry
but pulled your leg
he successfully tried
so now you had but cried
lovedly
Thu, 2022-12-15 13:28
Iam aware Gee you have read my comment just say yes I will
delete it
as I have received all your sincere inputs
ask Cats
Geezer
Thu, 2022-12-15 15:03
It is not...
my fault if you misinterpret what I say. Instead of jumping to conclusions, you should read more carefully. I'm not deleting what I said! In case you missed it, the comment was meant to say that I would recommend that your works be read by all amateur
beginning poets, NOT that you are on an amateur level. That way, they will have the benefit of knowing that not all poetry has to abide by rigid rules. You break the rules yet provide good poetry, what is wrong with that? ~ Geez.
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author commentlovedly
Fri, 2022-12-16 00:49
may be
u r right
I am composing my poetry like Shakespeare perhaps did
since age 14
Usually I am the one who misunderstood ...This time I did .
Thnx for guidance.... I shall not post for a while ---till others catch up
The stream shall flow still without me
ONLY till I can hold my horses
as Cat and you advised
Thanks Gee
Geezer
Fri, 2022-12-16 09:09
I will post...
for you today. I think I can do your style. Rest up and have a day off. LoL
~ Geez.
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author commentlovedly
Fri, 2022-12-16 10:07
I shall welcome
was a testing day not to post a poem though for individuals I just managed The night beckons me not to be a serious whatever .......Gee you know...I brought up a few unread poems did you notice
good day is it snowing up there
Geezer
Fri, 2022-12-16 15:03
My Dear Sir...
it is just shy of 3 pm. and I am on my third start of the day! I will get your poem on my time out there shortly. ~ Geez.
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author commentlovedly
Sat, 2022-12-17 00:09
Why the error of Sirring
I stand out
from the poets perfection ring
to that extent I'm
OUTSTANDING.
Yes my friend
call me lovedly
the silly anony
who is not only amateurish
but also poetically childish
lets remain just friendly
Geezer
Sat, 2022-12-17 00:24
I thought...
we were doing that! Remaining friendly, I mean. You are far behind in what you are reading. Come back tomorrow, when I want you to write. I hope that your muse brings you something that will inspire you to write of the warmth of friendship and the holiday season. ~ Geez.
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author commentSeren
Thu, 2023-01-19 13:29
Dearest Bro
I'm feeling the pain of your recent losses in this. Maybe the muse hasn't gone but the pain makes it hard to write. The poem I am writing for my Dad is tearing at me a piece at a time. I am so close but everytime I get to those last couple of stanzas I fall apart. The words will come. I know Dad will stand with his hand on my shoulder this time and hand on heart.
Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx (((hug)))
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats