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Pasture
We all start out not to last
Time starts slow then passes fast
We all are destined to one day die
We are all bound sometimes to cry
We are young think the world is ours
What took us minutes now takes hours
Our hearts are full of love when new
Gets broken when love is through
Die alone either in joy or disaster
One way or the other we are all put
To pasture
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words:
I now this is not my best work,
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-07-26 13:36
The situation in life
There's no magic wand that can solve all our problems. Whatever situation we see our selves is totally our predestined end.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Depressed 1
Tue, 2022-07-26 21:41
True
That is true. Destiny cannot be changed.
https://www.artofelpaso.com/
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2022-07-26 19:46
I’ll make suggestions
True words. Well done. If you wanted it to be super tight. I rearranged it. Obviously these are suggestions to be taken lightly. I really liked it as it was. It’s sad but beautiful. And it’s good motivation for not wasting time. Talk to that person you’re crushing on, apply for that job, tell everyone you love them all the time, and be kind to yourself because you can’t extend kindness if you’re cruel to yourself. You doing a good job .
None of us is built to last
Time starts slow then passes fast
We’re all destined one day, to die
We are all bound sometimes to cry
We’re young and think the world is ours
What took us minutes now takes hours
Our hearts are full of love when new
Broken, void, when love is through
We die alone in joy or disaster
Like it or not we’re all put to pasture
Like I said, use them as you will,
Tim
Depressed 1
Tue, 2022-07-26 21:42
To Late?
When is it to late to do those things?
https://www.artofelpaso.com/