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Saints Don't Suicide (LYRICS by: eddy styx)
I know the words I've heard the song
thing is I'm too far down to care
don't want to listen to the music
when I can't sing along
open my mouth and children stare
just a ghost without a voice
a solitary man who made a choice
took the long road
maybe the wrong road
was turned back at the gate
shame and regret, I couldn’t hide
because Saints don't suicide...
Hey son you're a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
among the rest of the faceless masses
in this dog eat dog world life there’s no free passes
Hey son you’re a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
if you want to die young you have to earn it
seen your record…think maybe you should burn it
broken and twisted once more
a man so alone; loss of dignity and pride
don't want to listen to the music
as I stumble amongst the poor
no place safe for me to survive
just a ghost without a voice
a man who made a choice
took the long road
maybe the wrong road
was turned back at the gate
guilt and remorse, I couldn’t hide
because Saints don't suicide…
…Saints just don’t suicide!
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RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-10 16:56
This is amazing
Such powerful lyrics! I cannot love this enough! The title and content go hand in hand. Absolutely fantastic.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-02-11 08:37
dear Rose Black,
I take it you have had some thoughts take you down this dark avenue? this is kind of my stop-gap. I'm glad you liked it. I much enjoyed your response/comment. thank you very much!
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author commentRoseBlack
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:18
Unfortunately
I have and this poem resonates with me and those thoughts.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-02-12 08:11
dear Carrie,
I hope they have passed, as I, for one am so glad you are here with us!
*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat
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author commentPoets Hand
Fri, 2023-02-10 21:15
Saints Don't Suicide
The pathos of this is amazing. The poem evokes a depth of understanding of the value and or ones judgement of what is important in life.
I really liked the poem although it left me a little sad.
Poets Hand
Hannah
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-02-11 15:41
dear Hannah,
sorry to have caused you any distress. I was just feeling a little maudlin at the moment. thank you for reading and responding.
*ever eddy styx
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author commentPoets Hand
Sat, 2023-02-11 17:19
sad poems
Poems that can change emotions in the reader are truly potent
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-02-11 17:32
dear Hannah,
your saying that...you have no idea how much that means to me, thank you so very much.
*ever eddy
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author commentLightning Dust
Fri, 2023-02-10 23:58
Hi Candlewitch
Jayne said to check you and Eddy out. This was the first one I found.
Heart-rending write. I am new to Neopoet and I am just feeling my way round.
This is a amazing bit of writing.
LD
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-02-11 17:37
dear LD,
Jayne is a very special Lady! I must thank her for directing you my way! welcome to Neopoet, we are very glad to meet you! thank you for taking the time to read my poem!
*ever, eddy styx
*hugs, Cat
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author commentSeren
Sun, 2023-02-12 09:02
Dearest Sis
This is a masterpiece I absolutely adore this. Tell Eddy he's a genius ;)
I wish you could see my face im wrapped. It's that good!!!.
These parts are my favourite!!! You know I rarely pick out part of a poem I love but here are my favourite lines. You know my history and it resonated something in me deeply.
Hey son you’re a disgrace
go back to earth and take your place
if you want to die young you have to earn it
seen your record…think maybe you should burn it
broken and twisted once more
a man so alone; loss of dignity and pride
don't want to listen to the music
as I stumble amongst the poor
no place safe for me to survive
just a ghost without a voice
a man who made a choice
Bellissimo Bella!!!
Much love Always Sis xox
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-02-12 09:19
dear poetic one,
may I also call you Sis? I am a fan of your poetry! thanks for your nod of approval and the extremely kind things you have said. I very much appreciate it.
* thanks, eddy
dear Sis,
you made his day!!!
love you, Lilbug, Cat
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author commentSeren
Sun, 2023-02-12 09:29
Dearest Eddy
I've been a fan for a long time it would be an honour to be called Sis.
You know I don't ever say anything I don't mean. Gets me in the Poo sometimes but I say it how I see it or read it in this case. You've outdone yourself Eddy!!!
Much love Always Sis xox
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-02-12 11:09
;)
many smiles, Sis!
thanks, eddy
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author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-02-12 13:15
Ok
Sorry I’m really behind. I’m recording a song for the wife and it needs to be finished to acceptable standard by Tuesday for Valentine’s. See he’s a saint because they beheaded him for ministering underground Christians. I believe you can go see his skull in the Vatican.
So, you’ve got verse, pre chorus, chorus, bridge for 2 stanzas, verse, pre chorus, chorus.
It’s structured enough. Absolutely. I am pretty swamped with my recording syllabus. I’m not sure if I can get to this any time soon but I’ll keep the words hanging around the studio maybe something just happens.
Nice job,
Tim
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-02-12 15:25
thanks Tim,
I have had help with it through the stream, so I do not take all the credit. thanks for reading. I wanted to know what you thought of it.
*ever, eddy
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