The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "The Wall," effectively uses vivid imagery and emotive language to convey a sense of reverence and sorrow. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved to enhance its overall impact.

1. Consistency in Rhyme Scheme: The poem seems to follow an ABAB rhyme scheme, but there are instances where this pattern is not maintained. For example, the fourth stanza breaks this pattern. Consistency in rhyme scheme can help maintain rhythm and flow.

2. Use of Clichés: Phrases like "tears flow like rain" are clichéd and may not have the desired impact on readers. Consider using more original metaphors or similes to convey emotion.

3. Show, Don't Tell: The poem tells the reader about the emotions experienced, such as in the line "My gratitude can never be complete." Instead, consider showing these emotions through actions or sensory details.

4. Word Choice: The poem uses words like "tons" and "stroll" which may not fit the solemn and reverent tone of the poem. Consider using words that better match the mood and theme of the poem.

5. Punctuation: The poem could benefit from more consistent punctuation. For example, the semicolon in the third stanza seems out of place and could be replaced with a comma or period for better readability.

6. Poetic Devices: The poem could benefit from the use of more poetic devices like alliteration, assonance, or personification to add depth and richness to the language.

7. Theme Development: The poem introduces the theme of questioning war's wisdom in the fifth stanza. This theme could be introduced earlier and developed more throughout the poem to add complexity and depth.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys a sense of reverence for the fallen heroes. By addressing these areas, the poem could be further improved.

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I like the title of your poem. the flow is fluid from line to line. I read it out loud to get a better feel of it. your language usage is good, too. it brings the message alive and makes it relatable my favorite lines are:.

Fifty eight thousand names are there
Etched for all the world to touch and see,
The names and dates of when they fell,
An epitaph of love; for all eternity.

thank you for sharing this piece with us.
*Hugs, Cat

Hello, Will,
Have not seen this myself - yet. But I did have the sense of touching it as you described so well in your writing. I hope to see it someday to experience and understand the sensation even better. Beautiful poem, especially the final line.
Thank you,
L

The reason I'll likely never go there is simple. It is in D.C.....But I have seen it via T.V. many times and I get bleary eyes every time. The last stanza of your poem is really good as it tells how the wall can touch you back

Hi Lynn
I think this is the first time I read you so a warm welcome to Neopoet.
I appreciate the piece for many reasons.
Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to reading more from you.