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Bucket of Dreams

Spread the word
and spill the beans.
My bucket-list
is full of dreams.

Some are big,
some humbly small,
but they are all
aspirations to call.

We might suffer
disappointments,
we might suffer regrets;
and we shall always
meet doubts and threats.

I wanted to be a poetess
and a good mom too.
I wanted a world of justice,
that speaks but true.

But as it tends to forge
I find me a dreamer
with a bit of despair,
a modest human being
who dreads and dares;

for life's a mix
of blessings and fears,
of fulfilled ends
and buckets of tears

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Bucket of Dreams" presents a clear and relatable theme of dreams, aspirations, and the struggles that come along with them. The structure is consistent, mostly adhering to a four-line stanza format, which provides a steady rhythm to the piece.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhyme scheme. While some stanzas follow an AABB pattern, others do not rhyme at all. This inconsistency can disrupt the flow and rhythm of the poem.

In terms of content, the poem successfully conveys a range of emotions and experiences related to pursuing dreams. However, some lines could be more specific or vivid to create a stronger emotional impact. For instance, the line "I wanted a world of justice, that speaks but true" could be reworked to provide a more concrete image or example of what this justice looks like.

The poem also uses a variety of poetic devices, including metaphor (e.g., "bucket-list is full of dreams") and parallelism (e.g., "we might suffer disappointments, we might suffer regrets"). These devices enhance the poem's expressiveness and impact. However, the metaphor of life as a "mix of this and that" could be developed further for greater depth and complexity.

Lastly, the poem's tone is a mix of hopefulness and realism, which effectively captures the ups and downs of chasing dreams. This tone could be made more consistent throughout the poem to strengthen its overall impact.

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This poem rings clear and true. I liked the duality of hope and disappointments expressed. Well done.

Thank you for reading and commenting.
I tried to be as realistic as possible.
It's my pleasure that you like it.
Looking forward to reading some of yours.

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author comment

Hello, Rula,
Very realistic indeed - life is a mixture of all you've mentioned in your words.
But your words are still inspiring and hopeful. Thank you for this!
Lx

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