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Don't You Dare Quit

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Fri, 2023-02-24 20:35

You can cry and you can scream
You can beg and drag yourself along
You can bleed or you can crawl
But don't you stop singing that song

You won't be victorious every time
You won't always leave with the win
The true test of a passion is losing
And then getting up and trying again

Tears slip from your eyes in the rain
But your goal don't you ever forget
You can do anything if you keep going
Friends, Don't You Dare Quit

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Structured: Western
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Rosewood Apothecary

Sat, 2023-02-25 05:19

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I like your positivity. It’s a great addition here at the site and it’s something I struggle with from time to time. Thank you for your reaffirmations. They remind me that I too hold all the power in the way I think.

Obviously good pattern and rhythm
Tim

Shelby Pryor

Sat, 2023-02-25 16:37

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Thank you so much! I'm so glad my work is helping somebody!

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2023-02-25 06:43

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you, and your poem are a breath of fresh air!

*hugs, Cat

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Shelby Pryor

Sat, 2023-02-25 16:37

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Thank you so much! :)

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Geezer

Sat, 2023-02-25 11:37

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The rhyme and near-rhyme are nice and easy. You leave a positive message and what more could anyone ask for?
Nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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Shelby Pryor

Sat, 2023-02-25 16:38

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Thank you for the complement, always a honor to hear from you!

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Shelby Pryor

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:26

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Thank you so much! That means the world to me!

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