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Measure Up

I know you don't love me anymore
I know that our love isn't in store
And while I think of you as a friend
You're nothing but my right-hand man

I see you now as just another guy I know
I'd take a bullet for you, I'm not for show
I finally don't care you are with another
You weren't meant as more than a brother

I'll bet she's beautiful, she has everything
She's got the smiles and the glitter and bling
It's not that I love you or care about that stuff
I just wonder, why wasn't the girl I am enough?

I cared for you, but I didn't measure up for you
Why would anyone else think I could make due?
I want to find a guy who could love me just for me
But when I look in the mirror a failure is all I see

I have dark hair and eyes that are greenish-brown
I can't compare to other girls who never wear a frown
I'm not a perfect size 2, I weigh one hunded twenty-five
When I hold a pen and paper is when I feel truly alive

I work hard and play harder, I don't believe in not trying
I'm insecure and, to be honest, I would be completely lying
If I said that I felt like someone could ever care about me
Why would they? I can't be what other women can easily be

I love mysteries and crime dramas, I know to watch my back
I try to help others, but I'm not good at cutting myself slack
Maybe nobody can love me, maybe I'm really just not enough
It hurts that no matter how hard I try I can never measure up

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Measure Up" effectively communicates a sense of self-doubt and yearning for acceptance. It explores the theme of self-esteem and the struggle with self-perception, which is a universal human experience, making the poem relatable to many readers.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The rhythm and meter of the poem seem inconsistent, which may disrupt the flow for the reader. The poet might consider revising to establish a more consistent rhythm, which could enhance the overall reading experience.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, the line "I'm insecure and, to be honest, I would be completely lying" directly tells the reader about the speaker's feelings. Instead, the poet could use more imagery or metaphor to show these feelings, which could create a more vivid and engaging experience for the reader.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structures. Many lines begin with "I," which can become repetitive. Varying sentence structures can make the poem more dynamic and interesting.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively communicates its themes and emotions, improvements could be made in rhythm, imagery, and sentence structure to enhance the overall quality and impact of the poem.

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Hit home for me. I have asked myself the same thing so many times. So much truth and emotion in each line. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Thank you so much for your comment. When I wrote this, every word of this poem was painfully accurate. I'm grateful someone else can relate. Thank you. :)

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