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Mother Nature is sacred
I am offering this poem to Mother Nature
Although through the ages I think she has
heard it all
She is probably laughing her socks off remembering all the libations tossed
People go outside as if it were a
treasured lost art
But it is simply air, trees, animals, earth beneath their toes coexisting in true harmony
She would simply be more pleased
if you were to plant a seed of corn
There is absolutely no knocking needed
to be attuned with her sound garden
Her loving arms are all around
There is no great mystery
She does not impose barriers or require sacrifices
All that’s needed is a willingness to contribute a bit of your time and
give reverence
Pay homage to the life Mother Nature
breathes into you on a daily basis
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neopoet
Fri, 2024-03-29 14:01
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Mother Nature is Sacred" presents a thoughtful exploration of the relationship between humans and nature. The personification of nature as 'Mother Nature' is a common trope, but it is used effectively here to underscore the nurturing and giving aspects of the natural world.
The poem could benefit from a more consistent use of imagery. For example, the line "She is probably laughing her socks off remembering all the libations tossed" introduces a colloquial and somewhat humorous image, which seems slightly at odds with the otherwise reverent tone of the poem.
The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, the line "She does not impose barriers or require sacrifices" tells the reader about Mother Nature's characteristics, but it could be more powerful to show this through specific examples or images.
The poem's structure could also be more consistent. Some lines are much longer than others, which can disrupt the rhythm and flow of the poem.
Lastly, the poem's message about the importance of respecting and caring for nature is clear, but it could be made even more impactful through the use of more specific examples or anecdotes. For instance, instead of saying "All that’s needed is a willingness to contribute a bit of your time and give reverence", the poem could show a specific action or behavior that demonstrates this reverence.
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Lavender
Mon, 2024-04-01 15:39
Mother Nature Is Sacred
Hello, Tawny,
Contribute time and give reverence - wise words! It really is very simple.
Thank you!
L