The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Passed by her hero" demonstrates a strong narrative quality, effectively telling a story through its verses. However, there are areas where the poem could benefit from further refinement.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from more consistent punctuation. The lack of punctuation in some lines can make the poem difficult to read and disrupt the flow of the narrative. For example, the line "Over the threshold merely four yrs olds" would be clearer with punctuation or rephrasing to indicate that the four-year-old is the last survivor being carried out of the inferno.

Secondly, the poem could use more vivid and specific imagery to enhance the emotional impact of the narrative. While there are some strong images, such as "Out of the blaze, char, and smoke inferno" and "Heavy coated soot and big black boots", other parts of the poem could be more descriptive. For example, the line "Back at the firehouse a hardy bowl of chili and a big deep chuckle" could be expanded upon to more fully paint the picture of the fireman's experience.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter. The varying line lengths and rhythms can make the poem feel disjointed. Establishing a more consistent rhythm could enhance the flow of the narrative and make the poem more engaging to read.

Overall, the poem has a strong narrative and some powerful imagery, but could be improved with more consistent punctuation, more vivid and specific imagery, and a more consistent rhythm.

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there is so much missing to link it all together.

You still have another 15 lines to link it all together.
I suggest that you just go ahead and try to link it all,
then put the lines in order, pare it down,and repost .

I was interested in the story as a whole and, you have
some good language. ~ Geez.
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