The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Over Again" presents a clear and compelling message about the nature of success and the importance of perseverance. The use of imagery, such as "a golden palace in France" and "a mansion in New York City," effectively conveys the allure of success, while the contrast with phrases like "get down to the nitty gritty" and "a fire burning you from within" underscores the hard work and determination necessary to achieve it.

However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved. The rhythm and meter of the poem are inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For example, the line "Winners never take a vacation" has a different number of syllables than the lines around it, which can make the poem feel disjointed. Working to establish a more consistent rhythm could enhance the overall reading experience.

Additionally, some of the language used in the poem is clichéd, such as "get down to the nitty gritty" and "a fire burning you from within." While these phrases are not inherently problematic, their overuse in popular culture may make them feel less impactful to the reader. Experimenting with more original phrasing could help to make the poem's message more powerful.

Finally, the poem's message could be made more nuanced. While the poem effectively conveys the importance of hard work and perseverance, it could also benefit from exploring the complexities and contradictions of success. For example, the poem could delve into the sacrifices that often accompany success, or the ways in which societal definitions of success can be limiting or problematic. This would add depth to the poem and make it more thought-provoking for the reader.

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...some of what the ai outlined, I don't always agree that cliché is a bad thing, especially for novice writers, since it conveys emotion regardless of being used before. It is one way humans connect. Also, by understanding the mechanics inside them and how the effect is used in the poem, we can begin to form our own..."clichés" as a writer develops.

I would like to see the "we" theme carried through all of the poem, though.. and the last line confused me a little.

Thomas