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Until You Win

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Sat, 2023-02-18 11:27

When life just doesn't seem fair
When you think they don't care
When you feel that you are alone
When all hope seems to be gone

You have to hold your head up high
Keep going and never ask God why
Even when you fail again and again
Remember, it isn't over Until You Win

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Structured: Western
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Editing - draft
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Rosewood Apothecary

Sat, 2023-02-18 20:01

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Trying is living. Living is winning.

Great job again,
Tim

Shelby Pryor

Sat, 2023-02-18 21:57

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Thank you so much!

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