The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses metaphor and imagery to convey a sense of internal struggle and eventual empowerment. The "basement of my mind" and "demons of my thoughts" create a vivid picture of the mental and emotional challenges the speaker is facing.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or rhyme scheme. This would help to create a more engaging flow and could enhance the emotional impact of the poem.

The transition from despair to determination could also be more gradual and nuanced. As it stands, the shift from "Alas, no one has come to aid me" to "Stand back, demons of darkness" is quite abrupt. Developing this transition more could make the speaker's journey feel more realistic and relatable.

Lastly, the use of exclamation marks in the final lines could be reconsidered. While they certainly convey a sense of triumph, they also risk coming across as overly dramatic. It might be more effective to let the words themselves convey the speaker's emotion, rather than relying on punctuation.

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I think the language is well tailored, and fully under control. many of your alliteration were very pleasing.
extended metaphors are rare, and yours 'basement of the mind' is a winner.
starting at Alas comes the emotional outburst. it is totally different from the extended metaphor that set it up. Maybe you can think about separating them by a space as well.

Tyro

Contest title dear Mary!
Yes we are defeated by the fear inside ourselves.
Defeated then no one shall be able to conquer you.
Best wishes dear!