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HAIL TO THE COWBOYS

The prairie grass sways in rhythm
As the cowboy starts another day,
Sun's first rays light the morning
While the horses start to bray.

Coffee and biscuits on the campfire
Those pancakes piled inches high,
Cookie yells "come and get 'er"
Who says cowboys cannot fly?

Worn jeans and shirts with patches
Hats to shade their weathered face,
Dusty boots with spurs that jingle
Chaps adorned with rawhide lace.

Scarves to block the dust to come
Rodeo buckles to latch their belts,
Deerskin gloves on hands of steel
Tanned soft from last year's pelts.

Now saddled up and proper fed
Some deer jerky tucked away,
The workday will last 'till sunset
Cowboys know no other way.

Calves that need to bear the brand
Fences that always need repair,
Round up strays that wander off
Work the land with gentle care.

The great American cowboy
His work is never fully done,
He'll do it all again tomorrow
Windswept snow or blazing sun.

Hail to all our country's cowboys
Gentile giants through and through,
When we gather 'round our tables
Let's give thanks for all they do.

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The poem "Hail to the Cowboys" effectively employs a consistent rhyme scheme (ABCB) and rhythm, which creates a pleasant reading experience. It paints a vivid picture of the cowboy's life, using specific details such as "worn jeans and shirts with patches," "dusty boots with spurs that jingle," and "rodeo buckles to latch their belts." These details help to immerse the reader in the world of the poem.

However, the poem could benefit from more use of figurative language. While it is rich in concrete details, it lacks metaphors, similes, and other figurative devices that could add depth and complexity to the imagery. For example, instead of simply stating "The workday will last 'till sunset," the poet could use a metaphor to compare the workday to something long-lasting and enduring.

Additionally, the poem's language is straightforward and unadorned. While this style is appropriate for the subject matter, the poem could be more engaging if it incorporated more varied and interesting language. For example, instead of "hats to shade their weathered face," the poet could use more evocative language, such as "hats casting shadows over faces etched by time and weather."

Lastly, the poem's theme of admiration for cowboys is clear, but it could be developed more thoroughly. The poem could explore why the speaker admires cowboys so much, or it could delve into the challenges and hardships of the cowboy's life in more depth. This would give the poem a more nuanced and compelling perspective on its subject matter.

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"Who says cowboys cannot fly?"

If that won't get you the poet laureate I don't know what will !!

Obi.

Hello Obi.

Thanks for reading and commenting.
If pigs can fly and buffalo have wings, of course cowboys can fly. The incentive just has to be there, and chow at the chuck wagon is that incentive!

Thanks again. - Will

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