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Hot summer nights

Dry and arid weather,
Smoke fills the valley,
From wildfires makes the heat feel like wearing a jacket of leather,
Burning trees in its finale.

Sweltering sun brings up the fahrenheit,
No cool down in near sight,
Choking on fumes from the groves,
Mercury rises to one hundred eight,
Hot enough to make you suffocate,
Billowing smokestacks all around,
Blanketing our blue sky and stealing our air,
Turning it hazy gray until the cold front blows it all away, and gets ashed out by the Oregon rain.

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The poem "Hot summer nights" effectively captures the intense heat and smoke-filled atmosphere of a summer affected by wildfires. The imagery of the "jacket of leather" and the "burning trees in its finale" vividly convey the oppressive and destructive nature of the season. The repetition of the word "hot" emphasizes the overwhelming heat and the absence of relief. The mention of the fumes from the groves and the rising mercury further intensify the suffocating and stifling conditions.

The poem also highlights the impact of the wildfires on the environment, with the billowing smokestacks and the gray haze that blankets the sky. The mention of the cold front and the Oregon rain suggests a potential respite from the smoke and heat, offering a glimmer of hope amidst the challenging circumstances.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys the theme of a hot summer affected by wildfires and the resulting environmental consequences. The use of vivid imagery and repetition enhances the impact of the poem. Well done.

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The lines that say: "From wildfires makes the heat feel like wearing a jacket of leather,
Burning trees in it's finale, seem like they are out of context. A rather awkward phrasing of the idea.
I would rearrange these lines to say:

Like a jacket of leather
Smoke is filling the valley
Dry and arid weather
Burning trees the finale

You have many good, descriptive lines here, but they seem to be slightly out of sync.

I think that with a bit more work, this could be a little smoother
and much more clear.

The theme is good, the pace is a bit irregular.
You should try to make the great descriptions work for you without the extra long lines.
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Thank you for your comments. It was irregular on purpose because I switch from rhyme scheme to free verse a couple of times

Tyler jakeway

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