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Night Terror
Echoing through nightmares untouched by the light
Contorting and blemished beneath drowned moonlight
Controlled by the pressures that force the dismay
Becoming the monster you fear more each day
Collect every camouflaged outbreak divulged
You creep around corners with weapons you hold
Conniving and patient, wait hours on end
To slither through dreams, into terrors you bend
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Comments
Alex Tanner
Sat, 2023-06-03 04:42
Hello
Interesting and liable to grab one's attention. I do feel there could be more to this to really drag the reader in. Alex
Flower Girl
Sat, 2023-06-03 23:13
Hmmm
Hi Alex,
I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work and giving me feedback on it. I'll see what I can come up with to elevate this poem's impact further.
Thank you so much,
Skye :)
author commentCandlewitch
Sat, 2023-06-03 07:11
hello Flower,
I agree with Alex. you have a great start, here. I hope that you will add to it and share it with us.
*hugs, Cat
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Flower Girl
Sat, 2023-06-03 23:19
Of course
Hey Cat,
Thank you for commenting. When I do write more to the poem, I will make sure to post it on here.
Thx,
Skye :)
author commentRoseBlack
Sat, 2023-06-03 09:53
I would
Like to see a continuation of this as well. You have a great start and your readers would like to see more.
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Sat, 2023-06-03 18:01
I guess...
I would like to find out what is terrorizing your dreams. I feel like there is something missing, like you didn't give it enough form to make me afraid. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-06-10 12:05
I think I like it ambiguous
With so much of life and our anxieties about the future going unresolved, I feel like this poem is best left in that anxious state of trepidation about what may come.
It is good to see you post again. Like your other poetry this is very articulate, and really rhythmic. Excellent vocabulary and interesting choices.
I was wondering if you ever got around to learning that song I wrote to your poem ‘My Life’. Would you be opposed to me releasing it and giving you credit as lyricist? It’s a great song with great lyrics. No worries either way. Great to see a newer post from you.
Keep writing. You’re very good.
Tim
Flower Girl
Wed, 2023-06-14 00:36
Tim
Hi Tim,
Thank you for really taking your time to explore this poem in all its depths. I've been quite busy lately and haven't been writing poetry as much as I would like so I'm grateful to be getting into it more again.
With the song, where are you thinking of releasing, it and I think it would be wise to have a copyright agreement just to do the process properly, you know. Are you going to register it with a licensing rights company? I'm not sure what you may have in the U.S. but in Australia, there is APRA AMCOS and it's really handy with copyright and collecting royalties. Sorry if this is a lot to take in all at once but please let me know where you're at in all of this :)
Also, my artist name is Skye Maize, so the lyrics would be put under that name.
Thx,
Skye
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-06-14 06:39
As far as that goes
So…I use a digital aggregating service called Distrokid. They are a service for independent artists and technically they are my “record label”. They disseminate my music to approximately 25 streaming and download services. I’m on Spotify, Apple Music/ITunes, Amazon, YouTube, Tidal, Pandora…a bunch of others. I do not copyright the the compositions, lyrics, or sound recording themselves with the US copyright office. I am not registered with BMI, ASCAP, or SEASAC which are the performing rights and royalty collection agencies. I do own the rights to the recordings, songs, and lyrics by simply publishing them with Distrokid but the extra protections are something that should be done. Right now, nothing I record gets any attention so there’s no royalties for anyone to steal. As far as your name, if you wanted to be credited as the lyricist Distrokid would need your legal name, that’s how you retain rights as lyricist and entitlement to revenue.
https://open.spotify.com/artist/2VaYuOCEKpJ3AHh31O5Ylp?si=dLJY6dUbQguLec...
This is my artist page on Spotify. Rosewood Apothecary on all streaming services. There isn’t much money in it so far but I’ve been working on music since I was 11 years old and I don’t think I’ll ever stop.
Whatever you like is cool. I can also just sit on it and not release it but it’s a good song and my aim is record and release everything I possibly can.
I’ll look into the P.R.O.s and the copyright office here in the US. I looked into it before and I felt BMI was the best option of the three.and that has more to do with publishing rights if someone wanted to record our song we’d be entitled to compensation and with collecting royalties from airwave radio play which we will not likely get with no major label backing us.
Copyright is more about the intellectual property. The musical composition. The lyrics. The actual sound recording itself. We register so that if someone else uses any part of any of those things they need to credit us as creator.
As far as streaming revenue…Distrokid collects for us and we can see the income by song. So far the service costs $20 a year. I’ve earned less than $40 in streaming revenue in a little over two years so it is a failing business model. For me, it’s about cataloging my art in a place where my friends and family can listen.
Roll it over. Zero pressure.
Tim