Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
The River of No Return
The Salmon River winds and flows
Towards destinations yet unseen,
Through wilderness and canyons
Each wondrous mile more serene.
Through designated wilderness
Second largest in our land,
Two million acres of beauty
From the creator's gifted hand.
Petroglyphs adorn the walls
Carved by natives long ago,
Deer, elk and sheep on high
Swift waters far below.
The river known by another name
Titled the "River of No Return",
Native canoes could flow one way
As settlers were soon to learn.
Gorges deeper than the Grand Canyon
Five thousand feet of canyon walls,
This river flows two hundred miles
As eagles soar and the coyote calls.
Today this pristine wilderness
The same as a thousand years ago,
This gift will stand the test of time
For generations to love and know.
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
In 1984, the United States Congress set aside a national wilderness area in Idaho, known as the Frank Church-River of No Return Wilderness. The Frank Church Wilderness is the second largest designated wilderness in the United States. If you ever have the chance to visit this magnificent area, you will not be disappointed.
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
User login
Author information
Region & Country
ID
Favorite Poets
My favorite poets are:, Kahill Gibran, Rod McKuen
Other recent work
Active Workshops & Contests
Contest
Workshop
- Wading Pool: Neopoet How To Video Resources
- Olympic Pool: Earn A Poem Workshop 2
- Olympic Pool: Earn A Poem Workshop 1
- Plunge Pool: Stream Workshop
Comments
neopoet
Tue, 2024-06-25 00:00
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The River of No Return" demonstrates a strong sense of place and effectively uses imagery to paint a vivid picture of the Salmon River and its surrounding wilderness. However, there are a few areas where it could be improved.
Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter. While some stanzas adhere to a rhythmic pattern, others deviate from it, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. For example, the second stanza has a different rhythm compared to the first one. Consistency in rhythm can help to create a more immersive reading experience.
Secondly, while the poem does a good job of describing the physical characteristics of the Salmon River and its surroundings, it could delve deeper into the emotional or symbolic significance of these elements. For instance, the poem could explore what the "River of No Return" represents on a metaphorical level, or how the wilderness affects those who encounter it.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from more varied language. There are instances where the same words or phrases are used repeatedly, such as "wilderness" and "canyon walls". Using a wider range of vocabulary can help to keep the reader engaged and can also enhance the imagery of the poem.
In summary, while "The River of No Return" effectively captures the beauty of the Salmon River, it could be improved by maintaining a consistent rhythm, exploring deeper themes, and diversifying its language.
Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact
Leslie
Tue, 2024-06-25 14:54
W.L.
I really enjoyed this, it reminds me of my years in scouting.
The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!
William Lynn
Wed, 2024-06-26 10:38
Hello Leslie.
Hello Leslie.
Thank you for reading and for your comments. Let us strive to change the world, one poem at a time.
All my best, Will
author commentRula
Fri, 2024-06-28 03:53
this is a wonderful tribute
this is a wonderful tribute to the "Salmon River" and the wilderness it traverses.
Your respect and admiration for the natural world shine through in your writing. I also liked the historical reference including the petroglyphs and the "River of No Return" which adds a rich layer of history and cultural significance to the poem.
Thank you for sharing this one about the beauty of nature.
earned new 5hings about the river and got to read
❤❤❤❤❤❤
Please follow me on Instagram https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=
William Lynn
Fri, 2024-06-28 11:43
Hello Rula.
Hello Rula.
I am so fortunate to live in a part of our country that is rich in both its beauty and historical significance. I am also fortunate in that I was raised to have respect for these priceless gifts.
Thank you for reading and for your comments, I am so glad you enjoyed the poem.
All my best, Will
author comment