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When I win the Lottery
Wonder if I will become high nosed snobbery
Or choose to mask up to collect as it is mandatory.
Who will I remember from preschool or will that be too compulsory?
Should I just stick to my family as I would feel obligatory.
How far will the winnings stretch or will that be up to the actuary?
Definitely, not growing old as a weary spinster and will choose to marry.
Dazzle like England's King Arthur to Guinevere,
Amid the extravagant fanfare and pageantry.
Live out my elated teary eyed dreams carefree without a worry.
During the day, I will no longer be working rather basking away on the lanai grazing on an charcuterie.
While patiently waiting on my chef’s amazing appetizers of the finest caviar and calamari.
This will hardly be enough details of how opulent a home I will have; just know it will be grand and feature an observatory.
My wealth will indeed expand my territory,
Allow me to finally be able to invest royally.
Reflectively, all the finer things and the new socialite status may cause a stir among the paparazzi.
Hope they can simmer down a bit and not do me in like Princess Di as she was cut short of all her glory.
Please note when I win the lottery there will surely be signs to tell my story clearly.
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Tue, 2023-08-15 01:42
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively uses rhyme and rhythm to convey a playful exploration of the speaker's fantasies about winning the lottery. The use of specific, vivid imagery, such as "basking away on the lanai grazing on an charcuterie" and "my home... will be grand and feature an observatory," helps to create a clear and engaging picture of the speaker's imagined future.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved. First, the use of forced rhymes, such as "snobbery" and "mandatory" or "compulsory" and "obligatory," can sometimes distract from the overall flow and coherence of the poem. It might be beneficial to revise these lines with a focus on maintaining the natural rhythm of the language, even if it means sacrificing some of the end rhymes.
Second, the poem's tone shifts abruptly in the final stanza, from lighthearted and whimsical to a more serious reflection on the potential downsides of fame. While this shift can provide an interesting contrast, it might be more effective if it were introduced more gradually, to avoid jarring the reader.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of meter. While some lines adhere to a clear rhythmic pattern, others do not, which can make the poem feel uneven. Working to establish and maintain a consistent meter throughout the poem could help to enhance its musicality and flow.
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