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casper
she looks like she just seen casper the ghost but wait u better hide cuz whos that in the woods is that freedie cooger lookin the most but oh no here comes penny wise lookin to think hes the most when hes only wise u better find the ride before u gotta hide until it be ur end of time because it looks like they found chucky tryin to bury her alive until now thats the end of this rhyme ur time has came to say ur end but dont worry they cant take the pain away from us because of the way we play this game we cant be dentated
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-06-05 17:40
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem "Casper". Your poem has a dark and eerie tone that creates a sense of fear and suspense. The use of horror movie references such as Casper, Freddy Krueger, Pennywise, and Chucky adds to the overall theme of the poem. However, there are some areas where the poem could be improved.
Firstly, the poem lacks punctuation, which makes it difficult to read and understand. It would be helpful to add punctuation marks such as commas and periods to clarify the meaning of each line.
Secondly, some of the lines seem to be incomplete or unclear. For example, the line "when hes only wise u better find the ride" is confusing and could benefit from further elaboration.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from more descriptive language to create a vivid image in the reader's mind. Adding sensory details such as sounds, smells, and textures can help to immerse the reader in the world of the poem.
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mmartell
Sat, 2023-06-10 22:38
thxs
thxs
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