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Love's yesterday. (26)

I can feel your heartbeat,
even when we are apart.
Our veins are entwined with each other.
I can not, could not,
live without you.
And you kill me everyday for it.
I wake up, and plead for forgiveness
there has to be a way,
to deserve your love.
You are an angel, something from above.
I was flawed
before I was human.
I miss you, I miss you,
so horribly,
it makes my skin feel raw,
it feels lonely.
You kiss me, You kiss me,
And it's okay now.
All I know is
how to decompose
Flesh and bone falling
apart,
all for you.
All that I touch, comes to rot.
You love me,
You love me not.
I can feel your heartbeat, even now.
It's suffocating,
But I worship you anyway.
I love you.

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