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I only want you, in my life
amongst all the misery, the strife
Angelic beauty unmatched by any
I'll do anything you ask,
menial tasks, hard labor

you're my god, my only savior
And how I despise you for it;
Spiraling further into my desire
Eternal flame, ever bursting fire,
it burns, it burns, it burns,
The longing, the lust,
I'd follow you anywhere
I love you
I love you
I love you

Drowning in
your flesh
I bite into you,
sacrilege, of sorts,
clawing into you
ripping you apart,
the only way to satiate
my voracious heart
stay.
stay with me.
even if I push you away.

More than anything I need you
And oh,
how I despise you for it,
tying me to this earth,
in which I am loved only by you.

You give me your kindness,
but oh lord,
I don't deserve it.
tearing into your skin and bone,
I really don't deserve it.

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i would like to tell you guys that i love my girlfriend very much and this is just expressing my horrible obsession w/ her!! i don't hate her at all n she's very nice to me everyday

-m4gg0t was here

you could call me soph if you'd like. 

       The phantom of the opera is there. Inside my mind.

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Your girlfriend sounds delicious! ~ Geezer.
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She does taste pretty good!! specially w/ seasoning

-m4gg0t was here

you could call me soph if you'd like. 

       The phantom of the opera is there. Inside my mind.

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